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Moving:
) the idea of looking into the bulls as symbolic of people's desire for strength/superhuman abilities is clever.
2)the look into instant gratification seemed off-topic at first but the last sentence of that paragraph showed what the point was. it's nice when an essay isn't just "TOPIC TOPIC TOPIC" and takes a break to make another point once in a while.
3) the "door close" analogy is incredible! It is so telling and SO true. I relate to that very strongly.
4) this writer did a lot of research for this paper and it shows. The "drank" portion especially shows how much thought was put into this argument. By answering the opposition, the
Ack of desire people have for calming down, the writer strengthens his/her point tenfold.


Unmoving:
1)THERE HAS TO BE ANOTHER WAY TO PHRASE "Contemporary American Society" THAT DOESN'T MAKE ME WANT TO SCRATCH MY EYES OUT. It is so cliche and the only reason it really bothers me is because I do it all the time, too. But starting an essay with those word just bores the life out of me, which sucks even more because I actually really love this essay, but I started a little biased against it.
2)the last body paragraph regarding health makes red bull seem like it might be considered a health drink. Red bull is not healthy in any capacity and many sports teams have rules against using it to boost performance because of several deaths involved in mixing heavy physical activity with the drinking of red bull. This is misleading to The reader and frustrating to me because I know it is a stretch to consider it indicative of a society trying to achieve health; it is closer indicative of a society that needs more sleep.
3)I don't know why exactly, and maybe it is a personal thing with me, but I feel like this essay glorifies red bull as our savior and It seems irrspomsible. The writer fails to snow the dangers that we overlook in order to receive the bemefits. It seems incredibly one sided. Especially when it ends "red bull will continue to contribute to our lifestyle and embody it's spirit." it read as an ad for the product at times.

Signed,
Cassandra Rose Blaise DeMarco