Dear Whoever Wrote The Following Sentence,
I want to apologize in advance.
I want to apologize in advance.
Because I do not like it.
Sincerely, Cassie DeMarco
"In thinking about a certain idea, many sentences and ideas can be drawn by using detailed words within this idea."
The above is a lesson in "saying-nothing-in-as-many-words-as-possible 101". I am going to venture a guess and say that the writer cannot even tell us what (s)he was going for here. But, hey, you know what they say about assumptions. and if you don't:
Sincerely, Cassie DeMarco
"In thinking about a certain idea, many sentences and ideas can be drawn by using detailed words within this idea."
The above is a lesson in "saying-nothing-in-as-many-words-as-possible 101". I am going to venture a guess and say that the writer cannot even tell us what (s)he was going for here. But, hey, you know what they say about assumptions. and if you don't:
So, anyway, let's just say there was an intended meaning behind this, and try to analyze this babayyy. I'm going to start by breaking this down into several phrases and going from there.
"In thinking about a certain idea" Thinking about an idea is related to metacognition, or, thinking about thought. It is a process through which philosophy and religion are born in the mind of man and put forth into the world. Generally speaking, thinking about ideas is a good thing.
"many sentences and ideas can be drawn" I am interpreting "drawn" to mean pulled from or hatched. So far, we can simplify this to "Thinking about ideas produces sentences and other ideas" which still remarkably, means noting to me. maybe in the end it will all come together.
"by using detailed words within this idea" ... Wait, what is a detailed word? Let's interpret this as... a specific or a particularly descriptive word related to the aforementioned idea, thus simplifying this last bit to "by using carefully-chosen wording".
put it all together in the most suimple form and what do you get?
"Thinking about ideas produces sentences and other ideas by using carefully-chosen wording".
If we take out by using carefully-chosen wording, we are left with ""Thinking about ideas produces sentences and other ideas." If we choose not to repeat the word idea and can agree that sentences gets the point across well-enough, we are left with "Thinking about ideas produces sentences."
Ideas. Produce. Sentences.
Not only was this sentence intended to be read as a highly complex and sophisticated thought, the writer seemed to think that he or she was making a point nnever seen before, as opposed to one that is common grade-school knowledge. I would advise this sentence to be completely irradicated from the student's essay and never thought about again, because thinking produces ideas and many ideas and sentences..... yeah.
**Side note--- I am terrible at these diagnostic exams. I have a lot of trouble writing well or with any meaning under pressure of time. This sentence may just as well have been mine, and I don't blame the writer. However, it is a truly horrible, pointless sentence. and it should die. The End.
Signed,
Cassandra Rose Blaise DeMarco
"In thinking about a certain idea" Thinking about an idea is related to metacognition, or, thinking about thought. It is a process through which philosophy and religion are born in the mind of man and put forth into the world. Generally speaking, thinking about ideas is a good thing.
"many sentences and ideas can be drawn" I am interpreting "drawn" to mean pulled from or hatched. So far, we can simplify this to "Thinking about ideas produces sentences and other ideas" which still remarkably, means noting to me. maybe in the end it will all come together.
"by using detailed words within this idea" ... Wait, what is a detailed word? Let's interpret this as... a specific or a particularly descriptive word related to the aforementioned idea, thus simplifying this last bit to "by using carefully-chosen wording".
put it all together in the most suimple form and what do you get?
"Thinking about ideas produces sentences and other ideas by using carefully-chosen wording".
If we take out by using carefully-chosen wording, we are left with ""Thinking about ideas produces sentences and other ideas." If we choose not to repeat the word idea and can agree that sentences gets the point across well-enough, we are left with "Thinking about ideas produces sentences."
Ideas. Produce. Sentences.
Not only was this sentence intended to be read as a highly complex and sophisticated thought, the writer seemed to think that he or she was making a point nnever seen before, as opposed to one that is common grade-school knowledge. I would advise this sentence to be completely irradicated from the student's essay and never thought about again, because thinking produces ideas and many ideas and sentences..... yeah.
**Side note--- I am terrible at these diagnostic exams. I have a lot of trouble writing well or with any meaning under pressure of time. This sentence may just as well have been mine, and I don't blame the writer. However, it is a truly horrible, pointless sentence. and it should die. The End.
Signed,
Cassandra Rose Blaise DeMarco
Love this post lol. You take advantage of the blog and infuse your writing with the Odd Couple video. Its lighthearted nature made the post enjoyable to read, but still educationally stimulating.
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